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NaNiWriMo, Emotional Creatures, and an impassioned few paragraphs

Oh good, you found it. Yes, well, it was only a curious corner of the website that no-one’s seen yet, so count yourself among the first to set your eyes upon the first settlement, the Abode, of the Emotional Creatures, Creatures indeed that haunt every story ever told (well, certainly every interesting story but I digress), and when you think about it, every creature that has a capacity for emotion, for outrage, for shock, for joy, for absolute love and devotion to the pursuits of the heart is a creature of feeling; of emotion. And every of those creatures, or perhaps not, or perhaps so, is a human. Mankind sees itself as being the first creatures to recognize, with all 10 billion neurons in our mind, that we are creatures of observation and evaluation, of free will, and of emotion.

I ramble. I do so ramble, rambling so much, that careful observation will reveal a spoiler.

Never fear reader, because these unnecessary paragraphs and observations have been spared from this ‘book’.

Terminated, I’m afraid, with extreme prejudice.

I dreamt up this story for NaNiWriMo, a nati–no–GLOBAL writing activity where writers conspire in front of their laptops and keyboards to do what they want to do, spurning their social life; and they write. And so I did, renouncing school. I am at that age where a decision like that has consequences, unfortunate ones, and so on advice I abandoned it. It is now in a folder on my computer, 100-or-so pages of text and counting. It is not finished. Nor will it be anytime soon.

The progress I made into the story before I stopped

I was only able to write as I had because I had nothing to stop me, nothing to pull me out of the current, out of the bungee-jump, of writing. But when you do, when you are ripped out, I suffer whiplash, disorientation. Someone has taken a leaf blower to my mind and has wreaked havoc. The demon who crawled up from Hell, who likes Coen films, is gone. Melone, the young and extraordinarily pink hit-woman, is lost. The characters who moved and whirred as they began to move across the tabletop of my imagination departed, with no hope of retaining their original essence. I knew what they were once, and I do, but not when people keep pulling me out of the ocean. With school, with friends, with the social life that writers of novels must deprive themselves of to focus, I can’t recall them. So I’ll sit down, maybe not this November as planned, not this year, but next year. January is a free month, the start of a new year with my fabulous friends. I still find myself writing shorts in anticipation. Every little story I write for Clarkesworld or Voiceworks has a character from this in it, has a tiny piece of Jordan’s pure angelic soul, or Pro(methesus)’s kindness and warmth, of the Headmaster’s inability to connect to the lives of those he surveys.

 

I hope you like these. This one (for now) chapter and other such chapters like it were the ones that I look back on, not because they are examples of my writing, they are examples of what could be my writing, if you see what I mean. What could be done, what could happen, who could leave the School, who could encounter A, who could dive down to the deepest pits of Hell and find out who they are, truly are, and who could love so passionately a girl who only ever stroked a horrid cat and ignored him.

Thank you.

Chapter One

 

8 comments

rhapsody

WHOA this is epic, I can't wait to here updates in January! That's some amazing progress, especially while balancing school work. I'm so happy you're not abandoning this and plan to continue, I can't wait to see what you make of it! You're writing is amazing.

12th Oct, 18
damnedmonkey

Ohh, thank you so much, that means a lot! I'm glad you're enjoying it.

12th Oct, 18
bookwithbane

I love the way you have with words. Great story, with lots of potential. Also love that you included footnotes. It's a bit of subtle humour with a future world and some disability.

24th Oct, 18
damnedmonkey

Thank you so much for the response! The landscape is only going to get larger, weirder, darker and more bizarre as the chapters continue. The footnotes are a thing I love as well, and if you like them in stories, can I recommend Terry Pratchett's novels? He's quite an advanced writer, playing with the English language for great comic effect and uses footnotes in his Discworld novels a lot!

24th Oct, 18
ellipsis

When you say 'writers conspire in front of their laptops', I think you mean 'writers perspire in front of their laptops'.
I shall endeavour to read Chapter One as soon as I can!

10th Mar, 19
damnedmonkey

Oh God, yes I've done a lot of that (*w*). It's just ground to halt with me going yay, BOOK, oh crap is that when english's due? I just haven't done much of the ending yet. Unlike the brilliant @rhapsody and @sylvs who should be authors to look out for!!

10th Mar, 19
ellipsis

I finally read it! Sorry for the delay. It's very good. I like Kai, and there’s lots of funny stuff. And ‘Rembrance, a bratty and obnoxious child who sometimes wet the bed’ is such a hilarious character introduction.
It could do with some editing to tighten things up. Some sentences are quite long and full of commas, so they don’t flow very well. The writing is a little clunky and verbose, but the ideas are brilliant. Rewriting bits so they flow more smoothly will make the humour sharper. Also maybe (and this breaks my heart) cut out just a couple of humorous bits (or make them shorter) because they sometimes disrupt the pacing. Like the bit about Elle’s crying being like a dodo’s - it’s a little long.

18th Mar, 19
ellipsis

I like the idea of the Pr*cks. You should make it so their taste preferences are all snooty and epicurean and whatnot, and that they’re very fussy about only eating the finest people.
Are you continuing this story? I’m super curious about what happens next, and what Kai and Elle are like.

18th Mar, 19